This week we have been writing our short stories to enter into the BBC 500 words competition. We listened to some of the previous winning stories and discussed why we thought they were good.
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The wolf of the night.
Once there were friends camping. They found the best camping ground and they got into their warm beds .Suddenly they heard a howl in the distance, but they fell asleep .The howls got closer and closer, then footsteps were heard. The boys sprung up.
They quietly walked out of the tent. In front of them was a fierce wolf howling. The boys swiftly crawled back into their tents, shocked. They hid behind their sleeping bags. The wolfs footsteps got closer. Suddenly the wolf ran away. Morning came. They covered their tent with branches and leaves. The wolf came back to the camping ground! He got a big surprise the tent was gone. He sniffed the ground and found the tent, but the boys escaped the forest.
Lapland Life
We left Gatwick Airport at around 7am and off we set to the cold wintery world of snow.
Whilst on the plane, we sang lots of songs and played games.
As we got off the plane I thought ‘yippee’ I will now be living here forever. We collected our suitcases and set off to the Mansion to unpack.
“Stanley come on let’s go out and play in the snow” boomed Charlie excitedly. “Ok ok this is the best day everrrrrr” cried Stanley joyfully.
There was snow everywhere, let’s have a snow fight the two boys decided. They played for about two hours, there noses were all red and runny from the cold wind.
“Stanley all this running and snowball throwing is making me hungry, shall we go and get some food?” asked Charlie. “Me hungry, yum yum me want food”, replied Stanley. So off they went back to the Mansion.
On the way back, Charlie fell into an ice covered lake, “arghhh, Stanley help!!”, Ray Ray and Vicky came rushing outside of the mansion to see what was wrong and tried to save Charlie from the ice cold water. All of a sudden there was a moment of silence and then … a big blinding ball of light slowly came down out of the sky and with amazement Charlie floated out of the ice cold water and was given a magical gift of bionic super powers. He was wearing brightly coloured clothes and had on a pair of mirrored snow goggles.
Charlie can now do literally anything, but little Stanley is looking rather jealous, he wants the same brightly coloured clothes and snow goggles as Charlie, but most of all he wants bionic magical powers just like his brother. Stanley thought if I jump into that icy cold frozen lake just like Charlie did, will my wish be granted?.
Before he could be stopped Stanley did exactly that, he jumped into the icy cold frozen lake taking a huge risk of hurting himself or even drowning. Amazingly, this big blinding ball of light came down from the sky again and up came Stanley wearing just the same as Charlie, brightly coloured clothing and mirrored snow goggles. His wish was granted, he now had bionic magical powers.
“OMG”, Cried Charlie as Stanley flew up into the air to catch him, they were both flying around with excitement. Charlie was very proud of his little brother that he had the courage to copy him and take on this very bold defeat. At the same thought, Charlie was a little disappointed because he wanted to be the super hero of Lapland and now he had to share the fame with little Stanley
Two days later they were the happiest children in Lapland, not only could they fly, but they could also disappear, they were the fastest, strongest and most daring boys in Lapland. Skiing, husky dog sledging, snowmobiling was all just a piece of cake for them. The most dangerous event was the ski lift, but hand in hand they took on the jump and out of the ski lift they jumped landing perfectly on two feet.
The Magic Park
Emma and Josephine were writing. Suddenly, their teacher called out to the class to stop writing. The whole class were concerned. They had no idea what was going to happen.
Their teacher happened to call out a school party. They always had a school party. “This one is going to be different.” Called out the teacher. Emma and Josephine were now the most popular in the class because they were praised for their work .Josephine’s best friend Emma was amazed as they were both celebrities that got treated normally. Emma’s older sister Polly was also a celebrity.
At the end of school, Polly came to pick up Emma and Josephine as Josephine was having a week over with Emma. They could see the blue sky properly as they couldn’t see because they were in class. Polly said that they could go to the park. Emma thought she heard something. Then there it went again, but this time, Polly and Josephine heard it. So, they just went home. Josephine wasn’t surprised when she got to Emma’s mansion. Her mansion was exactly the same apart from the pictures. Anyway, Josephine had had a lot of sleep over’s there. The school party was coming up soon. At school, all the teachers were getting the things ready in the hall. The decorations were amazing and everyone was told to bring their own clothes. Now they were even more excited. So, it was the day before the school party. Polly, Emma and Josephine all went to the park. Suddenly, a glow came up to them and went inside the three of them. Then, they had realised that they got magic powers. But, none of them new how to control it.
So, they used one of their spare rooms in the mansion. They started to get used to the powers. But they knew that the school party would be coming up the next day. So, they made a plan to hide their powers. Emma had the power to tell the future, Josephine had the power to control the earth and Polly had the power to control nature. The day of the party came! Polly, Emma and Josephine were saved.
As the boy wandered through the forest he found a haunted mansion so big that you might get lost inside. The boy went into the mansion. He saw cobwebs and hundreds of mice scuttling across the floor. The boy started to tremble with fear when he heard ghost sounds and also feared that he was not alone. And he noticed that the more steps he took, the darker it gets. He wanted to go out but there was no way out since it was so dark you could not see anything. Just then 2 knives appeared and hit the walls boy was scared out of his life. He’s never saw anything like that before! But he continues to walk through this horrible mansion. And then he felt something following him from behind. He turned around and nobody was so he kept walking through the dark and misty house. When He was approaching the last room there he heard a horrible noise. He crawled and looked inside that room. There standing was a ferocious monster with 10 eyes,5 feet and 4 incredible hands. He was so scared and he didn’t know what to do. Then in the corner of his eye stood a sharp sword with a unbreakable knight holding it but the only problem was it was in the room where the monster was. The only thing he could do is to creep pass this ugly monster and quickly grab the sword. When he grabbed the sword, the monster saw him. ‘’roarrrrrrrrrrr’’ it shouted as it charged up to the boy. The boy couldn’t do anything but fight he ran to the monster and hit it in the heart. When the monster was stabbed it gave a blurring light. ‘Roarrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr’ it shouted for its final time. Then there was nothing. There was light everywhere as the mansion began to fade. The boy was finally out and found his way out. There standing was his home with his parents as he rushes of to hug his mum and dad. He was safe from that old scary mansion and there he lived with his parents for a happy time.
Spider fear
Tom was standing shivering with fear. There was a man in front of him, forcing him to hold a tarantula. Tom couldn’t though he was too frightened to even touch that monstrous beast. He was desperate to conquer his phobia but he was too afraid to hold that hideous spider. Tom’s legs felt like jelly and his arms felt like they would fall off. ‘Will that spider bite me? ! What will it feel like?!’ Tom thought to himself. Tom didn’t know what to do. Should he touch his worst nightmare or leave it?
Tom’s face was sweating as he saw that wicked man hold that big brown spider. Tom tried to remember what he had learnt at school. He was taught a spider would rarely bite people, but that didn’t help Tom feel any braver. The word spider and bite just made him feel worse. That spine-chilling spider was looking at him menacingly.
Tom looked behind him and looked back the spider but it had disappeared. Tom looked around himself frantically. “Where has that tarantula gone?! ” Tom thought in his head. What would Tom do to find it? When Tom had calmed down, he saw that the spider was climbing up his leg and he screamed.
The spider was clambering up his leg with its multiple eyes staring right at him in a way that made the spider look even more deadly than it already was.
Eventually he gained confidence and he reached out to hold the spider…
Layla stood there, rather confused. She didn’t know where she was. She looked to the left, then to the right. An icy feeling ran down her back, as she realised that she was in a graveyard. She slowly moved her head forward, trying to penetrate the darkness. She saw a creepy looking house, or as Layla would say a haunted house. She edged forward wondering whether to go in, her curiosity carried her over the threshold and she ran inside.
She looked around seeing the blood red walls and the silk cobwebs dangling down from the ceiling. She walked through the long creaky passage way daring not to breathe. Suddenly she stopped. She heard a quiet, wispy voice call her name, “Layla” She turned around, frightened by the shattered glass on the floor. She headed straight for the door and… it was locked! Layla now petrified, slumped down by the door, tears were welling up inside her, but now she couldn’t take it anymore, so she just let it all out, she cried, all she wanted, until she felt silly. There’s no point sitting here crying like a baby, she had to get up and finish this off. She strolled down the corridor, alarmed by the cobwebs popping down from the ceiling every five minutes. She said, “Come on, show me who you are.” Then suddenly, she saw a light figure, come out from the darkness. She trembled, but she wasn’t going to have a little ghost get in her way. She was stuck frozen of what to say, so she said in a clear, deep voice, “How do you know my name?”
“I do my research,” said the ghost “and, i’ve been following you.”
“How?”
“Never mind.”
“Who are you and why did you lock the door on me?” Layla said confidently.
“Revenge. You see, your father and I were hunting in the fields one day. And he shot me.”
“I’m so sorry.” Layla said, but it was too late. A weird feeling buzzed up inside her and soon she was lying on her own bed. She soon relised that it had all been a dream… Or had it?
The pig stood next to the goal about to score, he pulled back his diminutive, pink leg then prodded it forward with all his might… but he missed the goal, everybody burst out into mirth. He trotted away in shame. While he was escorting away he noticed something in the corner of his eye, four tatty, brown, dirty football boots, the pig carried on playing.
These boots are amazing. It was him against the goalie, he aimed for the top left corner… Goal!… They scored … and again… and again.
The pig realised it wasn’t him playing it was the boots so he tried to pull them off but they wouldn’t budge. The boots were stuck! He tried everything to get them off. Suddenly the ball came flying to his feet. The boots came off! The power of the ball knocked the boots right off his feet. He missed the boots, but he carried on anyway. He was even better without the boots. 200-7 to the pig’s team. The referee blew the whistle. They’d won! Everyone picked up the pig and yelled “We’ve won!”.
There was a boy called Ronaldo,he loves playing football,there is a special game for him tomorrow, it is the final!On the next day it was the final football match. But when the game started, he couldn’t see his family, when Ronaldo didn’t see his family Ronaldo lost his confident also he never scored any goals. After that the other team scored a goal, Ronaldo lost his tempure.
Next Tom, Lily, (parents) came to the match, they were so loud! they couldn’t even hear the crowds cheering deviously. Although Ronaldo couldn’t hear them, but he could see them. Adventurely he scored a goal. After, he was so relieved that he scored.
Ronaldo scored so many goals, that he should’ve been man of the match. The manger was really glad and proud of Ronaldo. Suddenly the whistle blew! everything was dead silent, the people wanted to hear who won, also who was man of the match. Real Madrid’s team! who won the final, next the judges chose who is man of the match. Ronaldo!
The magnficent, brilliant Ronaldo sprinted quickly to his family, clapping peoples hands while he goes through… Tom, Lily was proud of her son.
The chronicles of Emo
Emo opened the door … He felt confused. CRASH! The huge door slammed behind him. “Where am I?” he wondered. In the distance he heard a horrendous growl. Undiscouraged, he followed it, hoping that its maker might guard the way out. Entering a dark gloomy room, he noticed a little bear, but Emo, conscious of what was behind him, slashed his hand into the monster that hid in the shadows.
Suddenly, there was a blinding light that lifted him off the ground. Fearless, he grabbed for, and crept up, a crooked ladder that bizarrely led to his nice warm bedroom. “What a dream!” he exclaimed, as he looked around his safe, familiar surroundings. But something was wrong. A gloopy, slimy blob next to his punchbag. Emo examined it. Suddenly it multiplied in size, bigger and bigger. He swiftly ran to the door and shut it behind him. Here, there was a revolting smell. He was in a sewer. A swarm of rats came scattering by. Suddenly, from the open pipes, a huge pack of wolves pounced on him. He quickly took out his gun… BANG BANG! They fell down. Dead.
“ARRGH! ” came a booming, sinister voice. Zarmothon, criminal mastermind and Emo’s arch enemy.
“Now it all makes sense. Wolves, his favourite animal. Slimy bombs, his favourite gadget and just some other random murderous toys ’’.
Suddenly, Emo remembered. The desperate plan, the painful shrinking ray, the shock of entering Zarmothon’s mind that made Emo lose his memory. He was here to stop his evil plans and conquer him.
“FIRE!” An array of mini soldiers attacked.
Emo crouched down and threw a teargas bomb at them, but it didn’t work. The army came striding through the frothing gas. He took out his pistol and fired but caused no damage at all. “What can defeat these dreadful soldiers? Maybe I can find a way for them to destroy each other.” Emo darted into the middle of the room and just stood there surrounded by his enemies. They shot fiercely at him but he dodged every bullet. It was working. Now they were shooting each other and destroying their own army! Emo jumped over the fallen bodies and ran to another door.
There he was… Zarmothon! Emo was brave, intelligent and courageous but he was no match for him…
Zarmothon drew the infinity sharpness sword with an evil grin.
He slashed at Emo. Emo ducked and tried to hit him but slipped and fell to the floor himself. He scrambled up quickly and took out his pistol and attempted to shoot!
Like a pouncing lion, Zarmothon nailed him to the ground and stabbed down with his sword. Quickly, Emo kicked Zarmothon back onto the stone brick wall. The angrier Zarmothon got, the more his world crumbled. Bricks fell. Little pieces of metal scattered everywhere like ants. Suddenly Zarmothon fell to the ground BOOOM! Emo’s plan had succeeded but how was he going to get out…?
BBC 500 Words Competition
Bang! Lily’s mouth dropped open. She’d been gathering peppermint and lavender to relieve pain and was rudely interrupted. She crouched down behind a raspberry bush. From a gap in the greenery she saw a deer lying amongst tiny blue and red flowers. She held her breath and crept silently to the deer.
Lily’s eyes were bulging with tears. The deer’s fur was brown, soft and silky. She picked up the deer’s head in her arms. Lily’s hands were trembling with fear. Suddenly men surrounded her. Their eyes seemed flaming red with anger. Their fingers were poised on the triggers of their guns, ready to fire. “ We want it!” one of them demanded loudly. Lily jumped with fright. She was panic-stricken. She held onto the deer firmly, she didn’t want to give them the deer. Her hair covered the shaking little deer like a protective veil. “Give it!” they shouted. But then…
A gust of wind rustled the leaves of the tree just above her; the rest of the wood was strangely still and quiet. A white light twinkled and shimmered above. Like tiny wind chimes, the leaves began to move in a frenzy of colour and sound. Lily felt a tingle down her spine and as if by a swoop of magic, there was a little piglet with pink velvet fur standing next to her. She was dressed in a blue cape and her eyes sparkled in the sunlight. The piglet made the men vanish. Lily’s eyes opened, she was speechless. “Are you okay?” the piglet said sweetly.
“Oh… oh, I’m okay, thank you” Lily whispered, a little dazed.
Lily staggered back to her farm with the deer in her arms, worrying about the lavender and peppermint she’d left behind when the bang went off. The piglet followed delicately. When they reached the farm, it was quiet. The farm animals were all asleep. Lily’s heart was thumping. She went to the barn and put the deer down on a stack of hay. Then the deer lifted her head and came to life again. Tears of relief rolled down Lily’s rosy cheeks. She was so happy. She spotted a box that sparkled in the sunlight. Lily’s hand was trembling as she slowly and carefully opened the dazzling box.
The frenzy of colour and sound once again filled the air, just as it had done in the woods. Again Lily felt a tingle down her spine and the magical feeling returned. This time the swoop of magic seemed to awaken all the farm animals including the deer and a carpet of peppermint and lavender covered the ground. So Lily knew deep in her heart, that never again would her mother suffer from the painful headaches that kept her hidden in a dark room. The air felt fresh and pure. Out of the corner of her eye in the watery sunlight, standing at the barn door, was her smiling mother, beautiful and happy, free at last from pain.
The Floomer London’s first insane drop and loops.
Max and Reon are going to the park but not any old park they are going to the funniest theme park. Max Reon called Harry do not go to the park, it is not any old park said Max. Come on Max, ok but why does harry not want us to go to the park ? he is just jealous .We are here now. When I say three two one we let go of the bars three two one where are we ? I don’t no I think we are in sky dive, no you are not who said that ? I did, you scared me Reon that was not me if that was not me or you then who was that. hold on the ride is starting ah what just happen was this a dream I think so what is the day two day Friday yes we are going to the fun fair today Reon we are going to the fun fair ok I will come to your house at 1:00pm ok by that was a weird dream Max do not go to that theme park said harry Max do not run away I want to come.
I had a sandwich and 7 up which was very fizzy. Suddenly Ninja were at the cafe and everyone screamed. When the Ninja had gone the manager said to me “You have to help us!” I did not know what to say so I asked my Mum and she said “Ok”. I had to go to Judo class, I practised hard and after a couple of weeks I was ready.
When Mum and I got to the cafe the Ninja were there already. We fought and I won! As a prize I was given an ice-cream. It was very cold and had sprinkles and strawberry sauce and last but not least a flake in the top. Delicious!
After such an exciting day I went home and watched TV. I am going to the park tomorrow with my family, my Mum , Dad and brother.
“Ahhhhhhh!” Everyone’s screaming for there children, the air-raid bell is going on and off. Lucy ran down the stairs as quick as she could, dragging the two-year-old Tom behind her. Suddenly Tom tripped on the last flight of stairs. Lucy picked him up and carried him down the rest of the stairs. She got to the bottom of the flight of stairs, covered Tom in her navy long cardigan opened the door and got ready for the sprint.
(Well at-least that’s what everyone called it,) opened the door and ran… baby’s were screaming, Lucy looked round for her parents, the first time that air raid but she couldn’t see them. She kept running with all her twelve year old might trying to keep the tied Tom in her arms. Finally she got to the air-raid shelter she walked in.
She dropped Tom onto the last seat and once more looked round for her parents she couldn’t see them it wasn’t a big deal. It was very cramped in there; she was starting to get cramp. Suddenly they heard a noise above them a screeching sort of noise, a bit like a bee but it wasn’t that, Lucy knew what it was it was a… bomb. A buzz bomb to be precise! Everyone was silent, no one moved, time seemed to slow down. Then it sped up, the bomb was a millimetre above them, ‘ BANG ‘ a sigh of relief filled the air–raid at top speed. It had missed, taken off a bit of the corner but that was it.
A few minutes later, the bombing was over. They got out finally, and looked around for their parents. Then they saw them but not in the way they wanted to see them.
They ran over. Her father was on a stretcher…
A few minutes later they were in hospital. Their mother was standing next to the bed. The doctor confirmed that their father had broken his leg. He had been hit by the buzz bomb.
The next day they went back to hospital. Their dad was coming out!
That day, they celebrated. They had cake (not much mind), crisps and tea. They were all happy!
A few weeks later, her father’s leg was mended. It was amazing how quickly time had gone. And on that very day the war finished and England had won! Lucy hoped it would be the last war for England.
21 years later
“AHHHHHHH”
Fuzzy and James were on a picnic with their parents when they found themselves lost in a terrifying forest. Suddenly there was a whooshing noise and they were sucked into a hole. When they opened their eyes they were in another world.
They were blinded by a very bright light. When the light went away and James and Fuzzy could see again an image of their best friend Fred hovered above the ground. “Wwhat are you doing here?” stammered James. “I’m here to help you get back but the spell that is letting me talk to you won’t last long so I must be quick.” said Fred. “You need to find the homing jewels at the top of that mountain but be careful because the stones are gua ….” Fred’s image had disappeared.
“Ok, lets go!” shouted Fuzzy. “I want to go home!”. So they set off on their journey. It took hours to climb to the top and they were hot and tired. Suddenly a ferocious monster appeared and started attacking them. Thinking quickly, they used a rope to trip it up and tie it. “I think Fred was trying to tell us the homing stones were guarded” laughed James “Phew!”.
“There are the stones.” gasped Fuzzy. Sure enough two beautiful blue rocks glinted in the pool that the monster had been guarding. The brothers fished them out. “How do they work?” asked Fuzzy. “I don’t know.” James replied. They tried rubbing them and staring into them and even banging them together but nothing worked. “This is stupid!” yelled Fuzzy “I want to go home!” and he threw the jewel on the ground at his feet. There was a flash and Fuzzy disappeared. “So that’s how you do it!” exclaimed James. “I want to go home!” and he threw the jewel to the ground.
The brothers were back in the forest where the adventure had begun and they could hear their Mum calling them. They followed her voice and were soon safely back. “Where on earth have you been?
I’ve looked everywhere for you!” cried their Mum. “Not on earth” laughed James “and it’s a long story…”
Foxy dug upwards in curiosity. What would the surface be like? Foxy reached the surface. Great winds, howling winds blew everything away. Foxy found it fun. He was lifted off of the ground, Foxy was flying. Higher and higher. He grabbed at a star but missed and fell back to the ground. There was nothing, no one, Foxy wondered if he would ever get back home? Ebony silhouettes mixed with glorious rich purples filled everywhere he could see, dotted with glittering bright stars. Foxy was in space. He wondered off into the infinite abyss of nothingness. Foxy felt frightened and hopeless, he thought he would never find home or anything ever again. Suddenly the most glistening, beautiful shiny star ever. He stopped and stared in awe at it. The star started to fly towards him, shocked Foxy closed his eyes in fright. When he opened them again, he could see his family, he was back home. He looked down the and the star was in his paw. Foxy crawled back down the hole into the safety and comfort of his home. Then he looked straight up at the dirt and roots on the roof of his fox hole. Foxy started to dig upwards in curiosity….
BORRIS JOHNSON THE DIVING HORSE
By Evelyn Class 4
Borris’s knees trembled as his hooves stood on the edge of the platform… His mum and dad as well as his caring owner Mary are cheering him on but he still has no courage in him! He at last dived in . But when he reached the water he gasped for breath splashing everyone!“Come on Honey,” shouted Borris’s mum. “You can do it !”
Borris practised for hours even days, but he never got the hang of it.One -day his dad told him that the famous David Walliams was also trying to get into the Guiness world record… HORROR Struck!Dad was confused, he thought Borris would have faith and gain courage. But instead he lost courage!
Ever time someone mentioned the word POOL! He ran away with fear and hid for two day until he came back .One morning Borris sat up excited and eager because he had planned to go on a gallop that morning. As he stood up he by accident took the blanket off his mum who was sharing it with him . In an instant his mum woke up and sat upright and whispered.“ Are you excited to compete in the race today?”“U…u…u… mmmmmmmmmmmN…N…N..N.. N..ooooooooooo!’As soon as Borris had finished this sentence he rushed outside , but instead of galloping he was cantering.
When Borris got to his hiding place he thought about what his mum had said. He had completely forgotten about the competition, at the thought of this he shivered! Meanwhile at the stable Borris’s mum was confused ,but she soon figured it out. So she gently roused the others . When they were awake she told them the story ,and what she thought about it . Soon they were scheming a little accident for David!The afternoon came quickly ,and Borris soon found himself standing on the edge of the platform. SPLASH! Borris landed in the water after doing an amazing firework dive. But he knew David would win! Next it was David’s go. He stood at the side boasting about how good he was ! When he had finished boasting he stood on the platform … But instead of going into the water he kept sliding back and forth continuously, as the crowd stared in utter astonishment! Meanwhile Mary and Borris’s parents stood in the front row highfiving each other. They were each filled with triumph! Soon helicopters came from all directions reporting about the strange happing! But still no one gave Borris the medal … Years passed but still no one gave Borris the MEDAL!
THE END!
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There I was , sitting on my garden bench looking up at the deep blue sky with great interest. After a while I thought of going on a ride with my favorite horse Sapphire.So I went to the big bright stable and got Sapphire out.
When I gotten up on Sapphire I turned to the gloomy looking forest . I saw nothing but darkness in the forest. As I walked in the forest hairy black spiders started crawling on my leg! After a few miles I soon realised that I was reaching the end of the forest and I had to get home before it was dark.
It was now starting to get dark and I could barely see anything, so I turned to go home. After I reached the tree that I walked past first … but no home wasn’t seen so I countinued bat all the trees looked the same! ‘Were was I? Was this a trap?’ it was all I could think about . Now that I was too tired to continue and so was Sapphire so I had to stop but where would I sleep without any shelter of any sort. So I thought maybe I should sleep in a tree.
I ended up falling asleep in the tree that I thought was the most comfortable of them all. I had to leave Sapphire down at the foot of the tree for I could not put her up in the tree anyhow I fell asleep in five seconds without even realising!
When I woke up I didn’t feel as comfortable as I had been when I fell asleep. But soon I felt something nibble at my foot , suddenly shot up with a fright and there I saw Sapphire nibbling at my yellow sock.
After a while of cooling down I wandered where I actually was for I did not feel as if I was in a gloomy dark forest . I saw light all around me so how could I be in a forest?
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Gabrielle
It all started on a boring damp Tuesday. Dotty sat twiddling her thumbs at the locked old desk in her new front room. She had spent the last half hour trying to unlock it but now she just stared into a dusty corner and watched the spiralling patterns of the cobwebs swaying in a draft. The discovery of the monkey face carvings on the desk had been very exciting but now she was overtaken with boredom with her new life in the country. And this was only day 1!
She was frustrated at what her dad had done. He had persuaded her mother that their house in Brighton was stuffy and unpleasant and thought a big house in the country would be better.
Dotty strongly disagreed and thought the country was for nature lovers and grannies (which she was neither). She longed for the amusement arcades and beaches of Brighton and decided to set about finding some new friends.
She stood up and took 5 minutes trying to find her boots and the front door. As soon as she went outside she knocked on the first door she saw. The letterbox flapped open and a little hand poked through it. Then the door slowly opened and a frizzy haired girl appeared.
“Hello” the girl said slowly “are you new around here?” she said.
Excitedly Dotty responded with a “please can you play with me?”
The girl instantly jumped back in alarm.
“You live in the big house at the end of the road, don’t you?” the girl screeched.
“Well…yes” Dotty responded confused. The door slammed in her face and the letterbox opened to the mouth of the girl screaming “curse, you’re cursed!”
Dotty slumped away thinking how weird her neighbours were. She didn’t think to be scared, she just found it amusing. When she got home she decided that instead of exploring the neighbourhood she would explore her new house. She dashed up the stairs determined to bagsy the biggest bedroom.
She darted between all of the rooms on the first floor then she bounded up the staircase and went straight into a small neglected bedroom on the second floor. It had a massive oak wardrobe in the corner which Dotty slowly approached. She had to go and inspect it so she took the matching oak chair from the other corner and put it beside the wardrobe and stepped on it. Now she could see the top of the wardrobe, disappointingly dusty and empty.
She was unhappy. She hoped she would find something mystical or magical. She was about to step down when she noticed a small and metallic object. She carefully lifted it down and dusted it off. It wasn’t strange at all! It was far from strange, it was a key!
She immediately noticed the familiar monkey faces engraved on the key and bounded to the front room.
She carefully slid the key into the lock on the desk. It fitted perfectly. She turned it.
The Match
This is it, my big moment. I can hear the crowd roaring. All of a sudden we start moving forward. I can feel sweat trickling down my wrist, my nerves are starting to show and now I’m on the pitch. My heart’s beating rapidly and 20,000 people are staring at me. I can see my dad waving. I can’t believe this is happening. Then suddenly Joey Barton asks me, “What’s your name?” I’m speechless, my mouth trembling but I manage to whisper “P-P-Parker”. Then he kicks a ball to me. It’s the most shiny ball I’ve ever seen. It sparkles in the sun. I immediately kick it back to him but soon I see that all the other boys have rushed off so I go with them.
As soon as we got back to the stands I gave my dad a massive hug. We quickly went back to our seats. My teeth were chattering and my whole body was shivering but I still felt great. Then the whole stadium went silent except for a tiny section in the corner shouting as loud as they could. Our fans were muttering under their breath. I realized what had happened…. They had scored! I put my head in my hands and we slumped down into our seats.
We brought on a world-class striker but nothing changed – we were in big trouble. It was the 89th minute. Suddenly one of our players ran, like a hare, to the goal. He shot…. he’d hit the post. Suddenly, the ref announced three minutes extra time. I couldn’t help biting my nails. This was our last chance to score. It was a corner to us. Everyone was in the box, even the goalie! The corner came hurtling into the box. The ref blew his whistle. I thought it was the end. Then I heard everyone cheering. Why were they cheering? But then I saw it. The ball was placed on the circle. It was a penalty! I leapt up in delight and then I remembered they could still save it.
It was the last kick of the game. Charlie Austin blazed the ball, it hit the cross bar. All the players ran crazily at the ball. It was a pile up. The ref blew his whistle to see if we’d scored. It announced slowly ……GOAL !!! We had scored. The crowd went wild!! Balloons everywhere. Then the final whistle blew. You could hear us from a mile away. This was truly the best moment of my life so far. Every night I dream about our goal. We had won!